光有个漂亮的开头还远远不够哦,文章的中间部分也就是猪肚环节同样要写得充实潇洒,不然配在一个光鲜的开头下面,不但不能相得益彰反而显得干瘪无力,让老师的印象分也骤然下降。那接下来我们就看看如何将这“大头”部分写得出彩。 .Bb$j=
要在内容部分得高分,用到的技巧大约有这几种:长短句交叉、使用插入语、用词多样准确生动又形象、关键词灵活换用不重复、句型使用多样表述地道 t4f
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这类句子是跟着你行文内容走的,没有什么固定公式可以套,其精髓在于多用从句,顺带着插入一些短语进一步修饰。但一些优秀的长句你可以刻意去学,去模仿,然后灵活运用到自己的文章中去,至于短句部分言简意赅地跟在长句后即可。下面就拿某W的Comment中的漂亮长句为例 XGE
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1. These delicate sentences said by Audrey Hepburn, who is widely recognized as one of the most beautiful women, aim at one topic: it is one’s inner beauty that really counts.(非限制性定从,放在句子中间修饰中心词sentences, 显然要比直接+aim at好得多) J 6(~>g
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6.Even though Zhao has been handsomely compensated 650,000 yuan by government, which is expected to be more, this financial compensation still can not hold a candle to无法与……相提并论 Zhao’s 11 years’ torturous and freedom-lost prison life, thus confirming the saying that, “Money is not everything” .(让步状从+非限制性定从+复合形容词+现在分词作结果状语+引用谚语)
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