光有个漂亮的开头还远远不够哦,文章的中间部分也就是猪肚环节同样要写得充实潇洒,不然配在一个光鲜的开头下面,不但不能相得益彰反而显得干瘪无力,让老师的印象分也骤然下降。那接下来我们就看看如何将这“大头”部分写得出彩。 |Axg}Q|
要在内容部分得高分,用到的技巧大约有这几种:长短句交叉、使用插入语、用词多样准确生动又形象、关键词灵活换用不重复、句型使用多样表述地道 #EtS9D'd+
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内容技巧一:华丽丽的长短句 >U~.I2sz
写长短句的宗旨,一张一弛,文武之道,一长一短,长句在前短句后,通篇长句累死读者,通篇短句不够刺激,长句华丽短句简洁,穿插着用方为王道 x^_Wfkch]
这类句子是跟着你行文内容走的,没有什么固定公式可以套,其精髓在于多用从句,顺带着插入一些短语进一步修饰。但一些优秀的长句你可以刻意去学,去模仿,然后灵活运用到自己的文章中去,至于短句部分言简意赅地跟在长句后即可。下面就拿某W的Comment中的漂亮长句为例 WpC@nz?
1. These delicate sentences said by Audrey Hepburn, who is widely recognized as one of the most beautiful women, aim at one topic: it is one’s inner beauty that really counts.(非限制性定从,放在句子中间修饰中心词sentences, 显然要比直接+aim at好得多) K1uN(T.Ju
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3. However, flows of advertisements will not only impact the producer’s image, but also make the potential customers bored and even spoil the advertising program.(not only …… but also也是写长句时的主力 R?+Eo(0q,
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4. Wherever they go or whatever they do, they always bear in mind that they are messengers of peace, representing China.(bear……in mind, 一个宾从&现在分词作状语) ,^O**k9F
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5. Almost at the same time the news came that people in drought-stricken south-western China are facing horrible shortage of drinking water, people in the rest part of China joined hands to donate water and other resources, hoping to give a hand to those in trouble and be no onlooker.决不袖手旁观(有1个时间状语从句+1个同位语从句+1个名词&动词过去式构成的复合形容词+1个现在分词作目的状语,be no+名词表决不,动词搭配又合理,可谓长句中的典范) =Y|TShKk
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6.Even though Zhao has been handsomely compensated 650,000 yuan by government, which is expected to be more, this financial compensation still can not hold a candle to无法与……相提并论 Zhao’s 11 years’ torturous and freedom-lost prison life, thus confirming the saying that, “Money is not everything” .(让步状从+非限制性定从+复合形容词+现在分词作结果状语+引用谚语) k='sI^lF
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7. Sunshangxiang stood out as a dazzling pearl from quantities of distinct historical figures, confirming the saying that, ‘Women are no inferior to men’. (现在分词作结果状语与引用名言的完美结合,推荐) a}#[mw@m=
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内容技巧二:神出鬼没的插入语 bj(U?$
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单词作插入语,如:besides, however, otherwise, therefore, though kP%'{
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短语作插入语,如for example, by the way, in other words, so far, as a matter of fact, as a result等等 W2tIt&{
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